Bad:
From today's USA Today: British man gets life in deaths of wife, baby
The word "in" should be replaced with "for" to make the sentence more clear. The phrase "life in deaths" is confusing and makes it unclear that "life" refers to a life sentence.
Good:
From this week's New York Times: A master of words, including some you can't use in a headline
This is a headline for an appreciation piece on George Carlin. I thought it was slightly humorous, which is an appropriate tone for this headline.
- Ben Penn
6.26.2008
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